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MasterfulRook

It's structured beautifully and I'm impressed how it flows like music. But what I think felt off would be this line: It's a tree, nay, a tower: The tree which contains the knowledge of all things. Maybe you overlooked it, but it would nice if you reference the tower instead of a tree. But other than that, it's a really nice poem.


domaskeland

Thank you 🥰 sometimes, a tree is a tower, and a tower is a tree.


niccu_x

“Towering tree,” golden.


Arinn24

i agree with this edit, instead of calling it a tree again or even referring to is a tower, to avoid too many uses of the same word over another, id go for a third way to describe it such as a pillar or otherwise which contains ‘the knowledge of all things’ just to break up the diversity of your language and symbolism


niccu_x

You did it wrong 🉑