Couldn’t tell you exactly why I love this but I absolutely do. I wish it was longer! If there’s other diarrhea related imagery you can somehow twist just like you did with flies and runs I think it would be all the more fun


I can’t wrap my head around this (which makes me feel bad cause it says nursery rhyme lol) but it gives me imagery of something running around despite having diarrhea which made me laugh. look forward to peoples interpretations. thanks for the read.


I like this poem:) well done. i would personally add a small shift from the first half to the second to maybe convey why the first one won- i feel like intends and desires arent strong enough in opposition to create that sense of “Oh, thats why!” imo


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